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Mar. 18th, 2005


Ah yes, My first post ever. Phew.

The Glint

Part 1\?

Rating: Absolutely safe…. For now.
Pairing: The beautiful commodore and the magnificent pirate.
Summary: Jack thought he knew everything.
Warnings: hmm. Angst? Unresolved Sexual Tension?
Disclaimer: I wouldn’t Dream of stealing anything, such as those pretty pearls from the mouse. Fingers crossed.


-*-
run, desire, run this sexual being
run him like a blade to & through the heart
no conscience, one motive...
-*-

Rumblings.

Pirates are rumbling all around me. Of course, I don’t bother to listen. Not for a single moment.

Yes, I was kidnapped. Indeed. Kidnapped by those… Messy people, My tongue being extremely delicate.

And now…Well, now.

They had snatched me from Port Royal like a damsel. A drunk damsel - I am ashamed to say.
They had stared at me, bounded to that blasted mast, for 20 days and nights.
They had demanded, and of course – received that vile ransom in exchange for the commodore, -for me-, to be brought upon safety again.

And now.

Now I am standing upon the earth of the Port Royal, Being unloaded from the damn black pirate ship, having my hands cuffed behind my back. I know I am condemned to stand there without any further movement, or else I will be shot by one of the crew. Still, although unwelcome people are surrounding me with their rumblings and twitchy murmurs, I hear nothing. Nothing but the Sparrow.

Damnation, in the shape of kohl dark eyes, golden skin and jingling trinkets is swaying giddily right in front of me.

"Get aboard Gibbs, I'll be there in a minute."

"Are ye' sure cap'n? I mean, The messenger has already summoned the navals and –"

"Aboard Gibbs, now." Said the captain pirate, rather sharply.

"Aye Cap'n Jack" Murmured the Ex-naval bearded man while he climbed up to the deck of the damned. Sparrow just remained to stand where he was, his stare unfocused.
What on heaven's name does he want now? Apparently that raving human wanted
to say something, but…

Silence. A disturbing one.

"Don' worry 'bout a thing, eh commodore?" He says to me, thankfully breaking the silly but momentary embarrassment.

"Oh, I am calm", I lie to him openly, all while I knew I was absolutely fuming with him since ever. Oh, The desire to strangle him and his intolerable pride is flushing with in my internals.

He looked at me briefly, but his face still remained blank.

Oddly enough, The man's face froze of all their insane expressions since I was unloaded from the ship until now, when he came to stand here with me on this port.

"Yer eyes are glintin' furiously, in spite of what you say, commodore."

Why, on heaven's name, oh why does this man, this dreadful brute, can see, no –pierce-, right through me and my lies every time again and again?

And why does he have to be the only living soul upon this earth whom is capable of achieving that?

God, I despise that fact.

"Non of your business, pirate.", I spat.

No facial expression appears while he yet continues to observe the ocean, maybe his pearl.

His Black Pearl...

…My lost Interceptor.

"Aye, a'int me business", is responded distantly.

I gazed at him. Something…Something was burning inside of my throat. My rage. My broken…pride?

"Yours are glinting as well, though", I said smugly.

He was still silent, for some strange reason persisting upon leaving his face blank.
This is extremely unlike him, it suddenly strikes me. During those nights and days I was forced to endure his company all along he never missed a single chance to clumsily throw his irritating cheerful smug character all over my icy figure.

Yet then his face turns slowly to focus upon mine and he takes a step closer to me.

I tense…. slightly.

His voice is very low, very even.
"That is because you deeply annoy me commodore….Savvy?"

I was right. His eyes are glinting, shimmering even, with anger. The man was… being serious. For the first time ever since I have laid my eyes upon his silhouette. Is he going to hurt me now? Smash the last dot of pride I have managed to preserve and unleash his rage onto my blood - on my own port while I am stripped from defense?

Oh, That hatred pirate.
Blast him. BLAST.

"Not a single matter of apology or regret is about to be formed upon my lips Sparrow, What-so-ever. And no threat of yours is going to chan-"

My words are cut off by his index finger coming up very close to my mouth. I lean my face slightly backwards in order to avoid his touch as much as I can, without showing him he had actually succeeded taking me my by surprise and embarrassment yet again, this time only by his proximity.

Wait…
Did he just intend to touch my lips now?

"Hush now, commodore. I a'int really interested in your words at the moment ye see, under the specific current circumstances-" He pauses for a minute with his lips pouty in thought, his eye wander aimlessly just for a second, then back to mine- "And under any other general circumstances actually."

Oh no. Those nonsense of his are certainly not worthy of my response.
I simply glower at him with greeted teeth. The man is not about to make me bare the blizzard which is enveloping my emotions at the moment.

But suddenly his eyes are lacking some of the anger I saw in them just a moment ago. He leans further closer, and his voice is low and harsh, but somehow different.

"Just one more thing commodore, before I leave you here to your own miserable onsies…"

He still hasn't lowered his finger completely and now it is pointing at my chest, as if he is lecturing me. And he is leaning even more dangerously closer.
To kick his groin now… oh yes.

"You… I want ye' to take of yerself… Commodore, and not only while duty."
What? What, in the name of the flames of the blazing hell, did he just say?

"Oh? so you'd be able to make me feel like an imbecile for the rest of my career? You are to be executed Sparrow, whether it is me to-"

"Oh, just shut your leaking mouth commodore. I didn' mean-"

What was that in his voice? Hurt? To hell with it.

"Sparrow! I demand you let me go right away-"

His finger then pushed into my chest a little painfully and I gasp. His face is not very far from mine now and I am forced to look into his eyes. He speaks very slowly to me.

"You can't possibly try to mend your heart's broken pieces forever."

I gape at him. It is all I manage to do. Why? Why is he doing this to me? Why wouldn’t he just walk away? How will I ever be able to forgive my self…Forgive her…? To move on? Ellizabeth…. How.. could you? I…

No. NO. Never.

"You filthy lawbreaker, how dare you say those things to me-"

And then… Then he snaps. At me.

He pointing finger disappears to his coat and suddenly a pistol is extracted, so very swiftly I could barely notice it, and is pressed to my right temple. Warm metal against me, and I stiffen completely – silenced.

It is so hard for me to tell what I can see now in his eyes. Confusion. Some rattling battle is occurring there, within this man in front of me. He is struggling within himself… like me. So close.

His eyes are digging into mine for long moments, plundering my very personality, my core. He is searching for something.

I can see… no… can't be…Some sort sadness?

I am scared.

"Yer' wrong commodore. I wouldn’t dare say anythin' to ye'. I even happen not to know what to say to me own self. No explanations are found…James"

*James*. Never in my life have I ever heard my name pronounced like this.
My heart… yes, my heart just leaped within my chest.

"You are mad, Sparrow." I manage to bubble out unevenly, while forcing my sight on him.

He shuts his eyes for a long second, then reopens them.

"Oh commodore, I am. The thing is, ye' see, I am mad for things I shouldn’t be mad for.."

I don’t understand anything anymore.

I try to tilt away my head away from him but he presses the pistol further against my skin.

"Don’t move now", I think I heard him whisper against my face.

And then he moves his face to my shoulder, stops with his mouth very close to my ear.

I am shivering now. Cold sweat is covering my forehead. The pistol is gently thumping to my brow with my every shudder. God help me.

"Cant you see? The lass was simply not good enough for you." He speaks so quietly.

Ellizabeth…. Not … good enough? For me? But she is so beautiful…All I wanted was her smile… Her… embrace.

I shut my eyes tightly. So very tightly. Shivering so harshly I almost lean against him for support, while my hands are tearing against their metallic cuffs.

"What…why are you…"

His other hand comes up to my shoulder and grabs me violently, digging into my flesh. He is not parting away from my face.

"I just don’ know anymore James. Me pearl is me freedom eh?. I thought I knew everythin', But I seem to…..How can I…"

We both stir to Gillete's screaming voice at the distance. The navy.

He sighs against my ear, and the pistol is loosened.

I feel myself taking a sharp intake of air into my burning lungs.

And then, I feel something warm, chappy and soft pressing very gently onto my left cheek.

Goodness…. Those are lips.

His lips.

Not a single whelp is leaving my dried throat, but my heart is beating, no- racing- in my chest so forcefully I can hear nothing but it's cannons.

And… the silky touch is leaving my cheek now. With this comes a silent sigh.

"Please James, just… take care."

The pistol is lowered slowly back to his coat, and then his other hand's fingers are releasing my shoulder… gliding on my chest lightly while dropping to his side.

He steps away rather quickly, his eyes are in the distance. So are mine.

"Commodore Norrington!! Captain Sparrow, halt in the name of the law!!"
Gillette's voice startles us both yet again, but I wont dare to look at him… I wont…

But he does look briefly at me, exactly when I defied my eyes on him.

"Commodore." His voice is calm.. Or is it?

"Captain." I only manage to whisper. Good god. I will never dare asking my self upon what I have just gone through.

Then he turns his back to me…. And walks away. To the pearl, to his freedom.

I want to cover my face, but I cant. I am cuffed. In so many ways.

Then, foreign hands are touching me. Strong. Naval. Port Royal. I am back.

As he's climbing onto the deck he wont look at me. At his nemesis. He wont. He must'nt.

And me? I wont look at him as well. Never. I… have to take care of myself.

*Fin*

Tbc?

Well… that’s it for now. I hope you indeed have enjoyed this piece.
All feedbacks are welcome… but please, be gentle :)

Comments

( 12 comments — Leave a comment )
[info]rowana wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 04:55 pm (UTC)
I liked it...original dialogue, and of course, sparrington :D
[info]shrieking_ell wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 05:45 pm (UTC)
I think this is a good start - Your Jack is really insightfully written with his own confusion and desires and your dialogue is good. your James voice also has some really good qualities.

I noticed that you said you don't have a beta. Would you like one?
[info]ellurian wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 08:00 pm (UTC)
Re.
Hey :)

First of all, thank you for the positive feedback. Ahm, this is my first fanfiction ever... and I was extremly nervous about publishing it :)

I would love to have a beta, thanks abunch yet again.

p.s. - I might be a little ignorant about this, but I have to make sure. Beta means that one will reread the other's story and detect any kind of mistakes and raise some opinions, right? :)
[info]shrieking_ell wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 08:58 pm (UTC)
Re: Re.
Hi Luv,

Yes, that's exactly what beta means. I will warn you that i am rather exacting and a bit tactless at times. I would be happy to help you make your fic the best it can be. send me email at lorraine_falls@yahoo.com to talk more about this :-)
[info]wliberation wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 06:55 pm (UTC)
Ooh. Quite original in the way they were portrayed, and I liked it. Not the typical arrangement, psychologically. I liked that for once Sparrow wasn't the confident know-it-all-nearly-fortune-teller personality he usually is in fanfiction (not that I don't love him like that as well but change is good), that he showed some uncertainty and vulnerability.

Some con-crit, then. I was slightly... well, not put off, per se, more like confused by the format - the paragraph breaks, that is. I quite liked the curt style (though maybe you could go a bit easier with the triple dots). I liked the dialogue as well. And you know, I liked it that not everything was spelled out. And ooh, you did my favourite kink! The 'whispering to someone's ear', that is. I just loved the electricity and tension of that bit.

I don't know if you should continue, but that's just because I'm a huge fan of open endings and I thought that this one ended very well, left enough for the reader's imagination. But hey, I'm content with anything you decide, and if you have an idea for continuation...

Have I rambled too much already? :) Oh well, I'll just be over here waiting for more stories from you.
[info]aradiria wrote:
Mar. 18th, 2005 09:25 pm (UTC)
Oooo, very very good start! I'd love more though, just feels like there needs to be more. :P
[info]wildestranger wrote:
Mar. 19th, 2005 12:35 am (UTC)
Most interesting, there is good dialogue, and the sense of what's happening...there is tension but we don't quite know where it will go. I liked this a lot and hope you will continue!
[info]order_of_chaos wrote:
Mar. 19th, 2005 02:55 am (UTC)
Charming. Simply adorable.

I am scared.
I don’t understand anything anymore.


"Please James, just… take care."

[info]amaya_kumiko wrote:
Mar. 27th, 2005 10:12 pm (UTC)
This was really good. I liked how they were both battling inside themselves. very cool. for the first sparrington i've ever read... you've set the bar pretty high. :0
[info]sandssavvy wrote:
May. 11th, 2005 12:33 am (UTC)
VERY good. I like the depth yo gave to Jack.
[info]jenlan wrote:
Jul. 15th, 2005 04:26 am (UTC)
Lovely, and how you played out the interaction between Jack and James was well done.
[info]permafrosted wrote:
Mar. 14th, 2008 06:59 pm (UTC)
Yaaaay. Lovely!

Just one tiny little question.. could there probably be a sequel? Maybe those two could meet again. Just a suggestion.. (a good one! *winkwink*)

Ta~ ^^
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